ESSAY #3 ARTICLES

For essay number 3 I have chosen 3 articles that will help me to support my point of view on the effects of rap and heavy metal on teenagers. The first article is from the WebMD Health News and it involves a study that is related to my topic. It will be very usefull to my essay because it can help to provide support to the counterargument. Another article that I have found is from HealthDay Reporter. This is also another article that will help support my counterargument. It will also help with my regular argument because it supports my point of view on the topic. The last article that I found is called Effect on Mood Aggression, Suicide, Drug Use and Intelligence. This article gives both sides of my argument, the counterargument and my view on it. This will be very useful. I apologize for not having the website addresses I can not use the internet.

COHERENT PARAGRAPHS

The text says that “using appropriate transitional expressions, using pronouns, using deliberate repetition of a key word, and using parallel structures” are the ways that are important to writing coherent paragraphs. These apply to my essay because I need to write five to seven pages about one topic and repeating things isn’t an effective essay. Also, pronouns will help to keep my essay interesting.

THREE SOURCES

http://www.momsinc.biz/blog/family_life/allowing-cell-phones-in-schools/
This website helps explain a lot in my essay. I got a lot of my information from a mother’s point of view from this site. This helps to make my point to my intended audience which is the school administration. Seeing an adults point of view on cell phones in school is much more influenced than a student’s point of view.
http://www.schoolsecurity.org/trends/cell_phones.html
A quote I have written in my essay to state my thesis is taken from this website. The quote helps to determine what my view on cell phones being allowed in school is. The site also gave me information on how to put together a counter argument to my argument.
http://www.zwire.com/site/news.cfm?newsid=18053727&brd=1699&pag=461&dept_id=46371&rfi=6
This website gave me examples to support my views. It shows the story’s of bomb threats in different schools in Ohio which supports the view I have on safety of students in school. It also is used to show a counter argument.

"WORKING AT MCCDONALD'S"

The author of “Working at McDonald's”, Amitai Etzioni, believes that working at McDonald's as a teen-ager is “bad”. Etzioni uses studies he has researched to support his position. In paragraph 2 he starts off with a statistic about teen-agers who hold part-time jobs and where McDonalds stands on the list of fast food job holders. Etzioni also uses examples of jobs that teen-agers pursue. Lastly, among many other studies that Etzioni researched, the study in “1980 by A.V. Harrell and P.W. Wirtz” helps support one of his reasons to his position. This study shows the rate at which high school students holding part-time jobs drop out of school because they are “gobbled up in the world of low-skill jobs” (para. 10). Overall, Amitai Etzioni wrote a very good essay about the working teen-agers at McDonald's and helped his intended audience, parents, to think hard about making their children work through-out high school.

"CHILDREN"...AND..."STICKS"

In the reading “Children Need to Play, Not Compete”, the author, Jessica Statsky, feels that children between the ages 6 and 12 shouldn’t be in sports because of the risk of getting injured. The author of “Sticks and Stones and Sports Team Names”. Richard Estrada, feels that the name’s of certain professional sports teams are “highlighting ethnicity”.
Statsky uses statistics and quotes to support her position. A quote that the author uses is “I’ve seen children enjoying a spontaneous pre-practice scrimmage become somber and serious when the coach’s whistle blows” (paragraph 5). This illustrates the author’s support of her thesis and gives an example to her first reason, “competitive sports pose psychological dangers for children”. Estrada uses examples of different professional sports teams to support his position on “highlighting ethnicity”. The author uses sports teams such as the Cleveland Indians, the Kansas City Chiefs, the Redskins, and a few others.

CELL PHONES IN SCHOOL?

I believe that cell phones should be allowed in school as long as they are on silent. If there is a test being taken, only then should cell phones be banned. Two sources that I could use for this topic are http://teachingtechnology.suite101.com/article.cfm/fair_cell_phone_use_in_schools and http://life.familyeducation.com/cellular-telephones/school/51264.html. These sources provide a lot of information on the pros and cons of having cell phones in classrooms. If I were to write an essay about this topic, these sources would help to prove my position on cell phones being allowed in schools with certain exceptions. The sources give reliable information and are credible.

THE PERFECT CRIME?

While reading “The Perfect Crime?” I saw that there were a few traits. The essay presents college course traits. The author obviously researched a lot on the subject as shown by the great detail and the cited books he acknowledged. He has a great thesis statement and numerous facts to support it. Explaining peer-to-peer file sharing was a very smart idea because it showed the reader what it was and how to do it. The writer also shows at one point the similarities and differences between what his main point is and what the opposing positions points are. The author wrote with very distinct college course essay traits and it made for a wonderful essay.
These traits that the author portrayed are important to the essay to inform the reader. Without knowing what the author’s point of view on the subject is, the reader would not know what he or she is being persuaded to believe and would not be interested in the work. Also, without the cited works, the reader could not think that the essay is credible. The author wrote many supporting details in his essay which contribute greatly to the essay because it explains why he feels so strongly about the subject. This essay was well written and very argumentative.